WORKING DRAFT 1
Dear Dr. H,
Writing this first draft was really easy and I can truly say it is all due to being in your critical literacy class last semester. It opened my mind to more creative ways to start, continue, and end a piece of writing with a little more confidence.
Process for this piece is graded proficient because I feel like I was on top of everything with my work but could have been a hare better if I took better advantage of my time. Maybe this has happened due to my crazy schedule on Monday, Wednesday, and Friday with my 4 back to back classes.
Reasons why I have graded myself “Exemplary” in the rhetorical knowledge section because I truly understand my purpose with this piece and audience, and I show that I know about this throughout my writing.
I am proficient with my critical thinking and writing growth because I feel like there is always much room for improvement with everything I do when it comes to my writing, and it will take decades for all my writing to be perfect. With this piece I stepped out my comfort zone with talking about some topics but I am expressing my feelings and experiences.
I graded myself developing with my piece of writing in the knowledge and convictions part because I feel like I repeat a lot of words like “I” & “and” in my writing. Maybe building a better vocabulary will help me in the future with this section.
Thank you for everything,
Jose’ Umstead
Writing this first draft was really easy and I can truly say it is all due to being in your critical literacy class last semester. It opened my mind to more creative ways to start, continue, and end a piece of writing with a little more confidence.
Process for this piece is graded proficient because I feel like I was on top of everything with my work but could have been a hare better if I took better advantage of my time. Maybe this has happened due to my crazy schedule on Monday, Wednesday, and Friday with my 4 back to back classes.
Reasons why I have graded myself “Exemplary” in the rhetorical knowledge section because I truly understand my purpose with this piece and audience, and I show that I know about this throughout my writing.
I am proficient with my critical thinking and writing growth because I feel like there is always much room for improvement with everything I do when it comes to my writing, and it will take decades for all my writing to be perfect. With this piece I stepped out my comfort zone with talking about some topics but I am expressing my feelings and experiences.
I graded myself developing with my piece of writing in the knowledge and convictions part because I feel like I repeat a lot of words like “I” & “and” in my writing. Maybe building a better vocabulary will help me in the future with this section.
Thank you for everything,
Jose’ Umstead
WORKING DRAFT 2
Dear Dr. H,
I graded myself proficient for the process working with this draft because I was able to add major improvements and details to each new take of my writing piece. I was able to express my feeling with this descriptive piece because it was personal.
My intended audience for this draft is anyone that likes pure musical entertainment. I started explaining my senses from the opening act to the end. No one really knows what a performer goes through during performance time and I was just trying to express every minute of it, with dealing with my senses. Figurative language came in handy when I was trying to express musical sounds. I was able to find a website that helped me with onomatopoeia and musical sounds. It’s safe to say I might have over used this onomatopoeia style in my writing.
Reasons why I grade myself proficient in the critical thinking and writing growth because I was able to expand some simple things when I was given some examples of descriptive writing. This descriptive writing was easy to expand because you can explain your senses with physical and mental actions.
I graded myself developing in the knowledge of conventions category because I feel that there will always be room for improvement on my behalf on my grammar and phrasing with sentences. This was a little easier for me my but I know I always need to work extra harder on each draft.
Thank You
Jose’ Umstead
I graded myself proficient for the process working with this draft because I was able to add major improvements and details to each new take of my writing piece. I was able to express my feeling with this descriptive piece because it was personal.
My intended audience for this draft is anyone that likes pure musical entertainment. I started explaining my senses from the opening act to the end. No one really knows what a performer goes through during performance time and I was just trying to express every minute of it, with dealing with my senses. Figurative language came in handy when I was trying to express musical sounds. I was able to find a website that helped me with onomatopoeia and musical sounds. It’s safe to say I might have over used this onomatopoeia style in my writing.
Reasons why I grade myself proficient in the critical thinking and writing growth because I was able to expand some simple things when I was given some examples of descriptive writing. This descriptive writing was easy to expand because you can explain your senses with physical and mental actions.
I graded myself developing in the knowledge of conventions category because I feel that there will always be room for improvement on my behalf on my grammar and phrasing with sentences. This was a little easier for me my but I know I always need to work extra harder on each draft.
Thank You
Jose’ Umstead
DRAFT 3
Dear Dr. H,
Dealing with the information on my infographic I feel that I had a rough time trying to provide relevant information on my topic. I was trying to grab my audience’s attention by having key points and some pictures on actual schools and people. My purpose was not trying to down one school but show there is only a difference in the public’s point of view. Eventually everyone is getting the same education at any type of school.
I feel that my process work for this draft was a lot better than recent drafts. I actually put a little more thought into each new draft when I got suggestion from my peers. Changing up different colors and background for my drafts made it a little more interesting. I feel that super bright colors draws people’s attention before they even read the title. I have changed my draft up at least 3 times.
I know I have shown clear purpose on what I’m trying to bring to my audience with the title, different topics, and a class survey. A HBCU college or university is not a bad thing. Most people just don’t know what their main purpose is and why they have mostly African-American students attend.
I choose to do a flyer for my infographic because I felt that you could express your thoughts clearer visually. Bright colors make people feel jolly when they see it. This topic is not trying to convert anyone to do something they never thought to do before. Just being informed on what options are out there.
THE infographic is clear to read up and down and there is enough reading but not too much to get the main purpose across.
Thank you,
Jose’ Umstead
Dealing with the information on my infographic I feel that I had a rough time trying to provide relevant information on my topic. I was trying to grab my audience’s attention by having key points and some pictures on actual schools and people. My purpose was not trying to down one school but show there is only a difference in the public’s point of view. Eventually everyone is getting the same education at any type of school.
I feel that my process work for this draft was a lot better than recent drafts. I actually put a little more thought into each new draft when I got suggestion from my peers. Changing up different colors and background for my drafts made it a little more interesting. I feel that super bright colors draws people’s attention before they even read the title. I have changed my draft up at least 3 times.
I know I have shown clear purpose on what I’m trying to bring to my audience with the title, different topics, and a class survey. A HBCU college or university is not a bad thing. Most people just don’t know what their main purpose is and why they have mostly African-American students attend.
I choose to do a flyer for my infographic because I felt that you could express your thoughts clearer visually. Bright colors make people feel jolly when they see it. This topic is not trying to convert anyone to do something they never thought to do before. Just being informed on what options are out there.
THE infographic is clear to read up and down and there is enough reading but not too much to get the main purpose across.
Thank you,
Jose’ Umstead
DRAFT 4 MULTIMODEL
Dear Dr. H,
Maybe this is a silly feeling to have but I felt less prepared to turn this rough draft in. I know there is no such thing as making excuses but I feel that this is, because of the short time we had to turn on this working draft, compared to previous drafts.
I feel that I have a great start on this draft I try to state my purpose on the opening slide and explain myself with my pictures and sub-slides. I feel that some things are not as effective like I wanted them to be when I was putting this multi-model together.
The process of this piece was really hard to start once I got the approval to start putting everything together. My whole purpose with this is to show my audience that “Impressions can and will go a long way” it does not matter what color your skin is or what gender you are. No one is just judging people on a daily bases, but in reality people do judge you on your appearance and who you hang around. My first picture is stating you would not go to work looking like this. It is always good to look professional where every you are going. If profanity is always being used in your vocabulary people might not be able to take you serious when you try to hold conversations.
I have a great start trying to demonstrate my audience. I would say my audience is really dealing with people who are trying to have a professional career or be an entrepreneur. These are just basic common sense guides on what to do or not to do.
Some things might be hard to understand with my slide but I feel that visual people that like pictures would get my concept and flow of my work.
Thank You,
Jose’ Umstead
Maybe this is a silly feeling to have but I felt less prepared to turn this rough draft in. I know there is no such thing as making excuses but I feel that this is, because of the short time we had to turn on this working draft, compared to previous drafts.
I feel that I have a great start on this draft I try to state my purpose on the opening slide and explain myself with my pictures and sub-slides. I feel that some things are not as effective like I wanted them to be when I was putting this multi-model together.
The process of this piece was really hard to start once I got the approval to start putting everything together. My whole purpose with this is to show my audience that “Impressions can and will go a long way” it does not matter what color your skin is or what gender you are. No one is just judging people on a daily bases, but in reality people do judge you on your appearance and who you hang around. My first picture is stating you would not go to work looking like this. It is always good to look professional where every you are going. If profanity is always being used in your vocabulary people might not be able to take you serious when you try to hold conversations.
I have a great start trying to demonstrate my audience. I would say my audience is really dealing with people who are trying to have a professional career or be an entrepreneur. These are just basic common sense guides on what to do or not to do.
Some things might be hard to understand with my slide but I feel that visual people that like pictures would get my concept and flow of my work.
Thank You,
Jose’ Umstead
DRAFT 5 POSITION PIECE
Dear Dr. H,
I had a hard time completing this assignment I’m not sure why but I think the main reason is because I missed a few classes during this process of trying to turn it in.
My final draft is a little rough but I try my best to show a clear purpose with my topic. I do understand MLA format but I do a struggle trying to complete the cited page when dealing with a website, when the actual website page don’t have everything you need to do a proper citation. Hopefully with a little more practice I will be a better writer when it comes to MLA.
My process work is not my best and it was my fault due to missing some classes during the process of trying to complete this assignment.
My audience is not clear because I feel that racism is a worldwide topic. This is something that is hard to cater to with a certain audience because how controversial the topic is.
My draft is easy to read and has an easy flow. Maybe with a little more research my completed draft would have been even stronger.
Thank you,
Jose’ Umstead
I had a hard time completing this assignment I’m not sure why but I think the main reason is because I missed a few classes during this process of trying to turn it in.
My final draft is a little rough but I try my best to show a clear purpose with my topic. I do understand MLA format but I do a struggle trying to complete the cited page when dealing with a website, when the actual website page don’t have everything you need to do a proper citation. Hopefully with a little more practice I will be a better writer when it comes to MLA.
My process work is not my best and it was my fault due to missing some classes during the process of trying to complete this assignment.
My audience is not clear because I feel that racism is a worldwide topic. This is something that is hard to cater to with a certain audience because how controversial the topic is.
My draft is easy to read and has an easy flow. Maybe with a little more research my completed draft would have been even stronger.
Thank you,
Jose’ Umstead